Authors note: This is a creative piece that is in response to all the dualities in the novella Jekyll and Hyde. Throughout the first three chapters the duality of man is symbolically present through the opposites in diction. More specifically this line was my prime inspiration… “It was a fine dry night; frost in the air; the street as clean as a ballroom floor; the lamps, unshaken by any wind, drying a regular pattern of light and shadow… Small sounds carried far; domestic sounds out of the houses were clearly audible on either side of the roadway.” (49) Also please ignore the spacing issues :)
Soaring high through the atmosphere
A calm sensation drawing near
Clouds and fog blurs all sight
Fear and tremble fill the night
Children screaming, people sleeping
Babies laughing, parents napping
The ending tauntingly far away
We’ll be there in less than a day
The stars shine brightly in the sky
Peacefully glimmering while we pass by
Gliding through the sky so fast
Haunting memories flash past
Children screaming, people sleeping
Babies laughing, parents napping
The ending tauntingly far away
We’ll be there in less than a day
The First class overflowing
We sit here never knowing
Coach seats sparsely filled
The luxury and space killed
Children screaming, people sleeping
Babies laughing, parents napping
The ending tauntingly far away
We’ll be there in less than a day
Blue ocean drawing near
Yet the sky just got clear
Captain speaks up above
While we hug those we love
Children screaming, people fearing
Babies balling, parents falling
The ending tauntingly far away
We only have one more day
The plane loses control
Plunging deeper into the hole
Darkness fills all our eyes
Before we could say any good byes
Children screaming, people sleeping
Babies laughing, parents napping
The ending no so far away
Don’t take for granted any day
(Authors note continued)… To every situation there is an opposite side, good vs. evil. If we just look past what is at the surface and notice what is deeper we can make more out of life. For every evil there is a hero, and for every hero there is a villain; life is deeper than just superficial depth, don’t take it for granted.
This was a really great piece! Nice job. I loved your repetition throughout the poem. The only thing was I didn't feel that evil side that you were talking about in your author's note. Maybe after "we will be there less than a day" part, you could incorporate a terrible memory. But that's just me. But it was awesome!
ReplyDeleteI really love your paradox in sentence structure throughout your piece, as well as the alternative rhyming lines. I liked it overall and I personally wouldn't change any of it.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you tried poetry and rhyming to give it a echoing effect. I thought the good vs evil theme was shown well through the analogies, I especially enjoyed the one about coach seats on a plane. The only thing that I would change is to maybe keep your rhyming more consistent, because sometimes you had the first and second rhyme, but other times you had the first and third rhyme. However, I thought it was very meaningful, so this doesn't affect your writing all that much.
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